People say that “all teenagers are lazy slobs”, I disagree with this statement. The fact is that many of us go out during the weekend, go to see friends, exercise and go shopping.
People say that being a teenager is one of the worst phases in life. Apparently teenagers do nothing but cause mayhem, destruction and havoc. The truth is that they come to school and get into habits quickly. Once they’re used to that habit they can do it like a everyday thing, for example they set a time to wake up and they get used to waking to that certain time and eventually wake up by themselves. It is also an important phase in human life as the youth gain more confidence in themselves and socialise more at this age and as an adult.
Adults always tell teenagers to act like adults so they can gain respect and trust from other people. How can we act like adults when we’re treated like children? Parents tell us to make a contribution to the world, but they do not realise that a girl call Malala Yousafzai contributed to the world by fighting for the right for girls in India to go to school and she was given a noble prize.
Adults may call us lazy slobs but naturaly we are seen with friends walking around the streets, and in football clubs training all day.
“Dear parents and all adults,
You tell us to do exercise, then
You ask why we are tiered?”
We are told why we don’t go out on a sunny day But we are out nearly everyday, but it seems like we can’t have one day to relax. Parents call us lazy slobs as an age group, but we are misunderstood. When we go out parents tell us that we can’t because we always go out so once we listen we are forced to go out or take responsibility in the house.
Adults call us lazy but; most teens don’t get enough sleep. Researchers found that most young adults are not getting the right amount of sleep a night; experts say that in fact, people need nine hours, and are typically the most sleep-diverted of our population. But we haven’t yet found out the exact reasons why we aren’t getting enough sleep, but There are theories. Computers and televisions in a teenagers room can interfere with our body’s natural circadian rhythms, and disrupt sleep. Social networking and smart phones can keep us communicating with friends way past our bedtimes.
Some teens have jobs after school that continue far into the evening hours, or after-school activities that take some time to do homework. Classes are starting earlier and earlier, and many students feel overburdened with projects they’re hard-pressed to finish in after-school.
Our hormones are at a stage which they aren’t focused on certain point. Do you not remeber how your life was like a teenager?
Adults call us lazy but when they go to parties the next day they stay in and sleep, if a teenager goes to a party the next day they get up as normal and go out. But we’re known as lazy slobs. We always are told to do things for parents and as soon as we have a few minutes to relax as soon as we sit down we are called lazy.
Another stereotype of young people today is that they are all thieving, knife-carrying, troublemakers who waste most of their time dossing about.
Another is the drug-taking, posh private school kid from an affluent background who has strengths in all subjects but a weakness for having a few pills here and there, which ends up in them being expelled and being a let-down to their family.
People need to stop naively believing everything they see or read and make their judgements based on personal experiences. If a teen stabbing occurs, it is shown on tv for several days or at least until a more “interesting” story appears. When we do hear or see positive news, it features rarities such as a teen Olympic champion. Little wonder that the public are fearful of young people or that young people are scared of their own area.
April 12, 2015 at 11:17 am
Hello Anthony
You are beginning to use some features of persuasive writing such as rhetorical questions, anecdotes and pronouns.
In order to unlock the Expository Essay badge you need to work on your argument: I have some pointers listed below to help you.
1. You should state what you argument is in the opening paragraph;
2. Sometimes you make points that are quite descriptive. For example your Anecdote about Mala Yousafzai is good but what point/argument are you trying to make about young people?
3. Paragraphs 9 and 11 don’t seem like they are written in your style. Are they from th articles I gave you?- Can you use the content of these to help you write in a persuasive way- eg you could turn these into the power of three?
We will work on these tomorrow in class.
Ms Andrews
April 12, 2015 at 11:47 pm
Anthony,
I agree with Ms Andrews on this – you have written an excellent first draft – but there is still room for improvement. Stick with the targets above – they would really help.
Did you know:
You are about 200 words below you minimum word limit?
There are quite a few instances where you nearly achieve the Perfect Paragraph but you’re still not quite there. Have a look at the criteria and focus your efforts on this
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-writing/perfect-paragraph/
May 6, 2015 at 9:01 pm
Anthony, is this your latest draft? If not can you publish the last one you showed me in the after school session?
June 2, 2015 at 9:52 pm
Anthony,
Please re-read your first paragraph – is your meaning clear? Does it reflect what you want it to?
Learn the difference between their, there and they’re.
Re-read each paragraph and be sure that your meaning is clear – where will you need to develop ideas full? Where does your meaning need to be clearer?